Meg Golden Moderator
Posts : 50 Golden Points : 62 Reputation : 0 Join date : 2011-10-17 Age : 28
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Manco Beginner
Posts : 119 Golden Points : 160 Reputation : 10 Join date : 2011-10-17 Age : 26 Location : New York, USA
| Subject: Re: Missing Me Tue Oct 18, 2011 1:49 am | |
| Please do, it's cool, makes me want to read on. Let me just do a small editing for you.
In the silence you could hear the sound of the tree rustling with the wind. The sounds of a distant fog horn and the soft lapping sound of the sea kissing the beach. You look around as you walk down the dark street with nothing but the clothes you're wearing and some money you saved. Would they notice that you left? wWould they miss you? You just wonder as you keep walking.
Can't wait to read more!
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Meg Golden Moderator
Posts : 50 Golden Points : 62 Reputation : 0 Join date : 2011-10-17 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Missing Me Tue Oct 18, 2011 4:23 pm | |
| *thumbs up* As Long as your not critting my writing im good with it. I know im horrid with punc. and spelling. | |
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Zorn Golden Owner
Posts : 55 Golden Points : 134 Reputation : 3 Join date : 2011-10-17 Age : 29 Location : UK
| Subject: Re: Missing Me Wed Oct 19, 2011 4:15 pm | |
| :O
You used enjambument
Are you writing off a memory?
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Meg Golden Moderator
Posts : 50 Golden Points : 62 Reputation : 0 Join date : 2011-10-17 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Missing Me Wed Oct 19, 2011 4:40 pm | |
| starts out with a dream.... | |
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Zorn Golden Owner
Posts : 55 Golden Points : 134 Reputation : 3 Join date : 2011-10-17 Age : 29 Location : UK
| Subject: Re: Missing Me Wed Oct 19, 2011 4:41 pm | |
| Oh you can remember dreams ^_^ | |
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